A look into the mind of Usain Bolt
Usain Bolt, many people know him as the fastest person in the world.
Most of us found this out in the 2008 Olympics.
Usain Bolt tells us about how he won his first Olympic gold medal in the summer of 2008 in Beijing, when he was running the 100 meters. The reason why he talks about his first gold medal is because that was when he knew he was one of the best.
He talks about what motivates him during his races. It seems by degrading himself; it pushes him to his limits during this race and others. “I've talked garbage to myself and every race I've ever ran in.” Many versions of this quote are in the autobiography.
He seems to be worried about multiple racers.
Particularly Asafa Powell. Asafa Powell a teammate of bolts but the former 100 meter world record holder.
Usain Bolt knew that he was the Olympic champion of 2008, when Asafa Powell was nowhere in sight, even when he was still 10 meters away from the line he threw up his hands in the air “i was the Olympic champ.”
When looking at my newspaper report on the autobiography about Usain Bolt and trying to pick it apart you can tell that there are many differences between the autobiography and my newspaper report.
The autobiography and the newspaper article that was written by me aren't structured differently when coming down to the basics. The autobiography and the newspaper article both have extremely short paragraphs, some of them early two sentences. The newspaper article that was written about the autobiography has a maximum of three sentences. It is very similar to the autobiography about Usain Bolt. The structure of the article in the newspaper is mainly trying to get to the key points about the autobiography about Usain Bolt; by pointing out key details such as how he pushes himself during his races.“It seems by degrading himself…” On the other hand the structure of the autobiography is trying to tell a story about how Usain Bolt thinks and how he regulates his mental mentality during his races. This is one Detail about the structure that is vastly different from the article in the newspaper.
The newspaper and the autobiography and itself are two very different Forms of literature that are already structured completely differently. Meaning that there can only be so much in common but the two are so Vastly different that there has to be a contrast between the two, and that is because of how they are portrayed to elaborate on that is what is trying to tell a story about the person and the other is getting key details almost as if they were bullet points. You can see that very well in the newspaper article that I had written.
The point of view in the newspaper article is third person since it is talking about Usain Bolt and using his name quite often and says “he” Unlike the autobiography which is talking in first person since Usain Bolt is talking about himself and using the context all “I” And then he keeps talking about himself so that would be in first person. A quote from the newspaper that is talking in third person is “He talks about what motivates him during his races.” A quote from the autobiography in which Usain Bolt is talking about himself is “I burst from the blocks…” Those two quotes from the newspaper and also the autobiography are great examples of first person point of view and third person point of view. That's also a compare and contrast from those two.
The type of language that I used in the newspaper is very direct and getting straight to the point But if we're talking about about the words that I used I didn't use complicated words to understand because I wanted the reader to get what I was saying And what I was talking about some language that I used or some examples are “degrading himself”, “Many versions” and “fastest person in the world…” This is the type of language that I used in the newspaper article about Usain Bolt. Now for the language in the autobiography it's vastly different because the autobiography is taking the words that he is physically speaking such as “I was still 10 meters…”, “then it dawned on me. ” and “I kept my eye on him all the way…” These are examples of the type of language that the autobiography used. This is a comparison between the language in the newspaper versus the autobiography and how they are very different.
Something that both the newspaper and the autobiography have in common is that they're Targeting the same audience which is Usain Bolt fans or people that really look up to anybody that really cares about Usain bolt. I think in the newspaper I did a really good job of getting straight to the point and getting people that are fans of Usain Bolt willing to read my news article.
After reviewing these questions, I have given each section a score that I feel is best.
ReplyDeleteIn Question A for AO1, I would give you 2 marks viewing your somewhat ‘limited’ use of understanding the text's meaning, context, and audience. In this news report, you used information that was not given in Usain’s extract, which can be misleading. “Usain Bolt tells us about how he won his first Olympic gold medal in the summer of 2008 in Beijing when he was running the 100 meters.”, This information was never used in his writing.” The reason why he talks about his first gold medal is because that was when he knew he was one of the best.”, he also never speaks about his gold medal. Though in paragraph three you include direct quotes. You talk about the inner dialogue he has when ‘degrading’ himself. This information helped me better understand the context/meaning. This report’s audience pertains to anyone who may want to know about the events at the 100-meter run.
For AO2, I would give you 2 marks as well, regarding how your expression is obvious but lacks flow and communication. Your paragraphs consist of 2-3 sentences each, some being short only containing three words. This structure dismantles the flow because it makes it harder to follow and comprehend the events. However, you did stay on track with the content and made everything primarily relevant to the audience. You only spoke about Usain Bolt and his 100-meter story and remained on topic.
In Question B for AO1, I would give you 3 marks taking into consideration your use of comparative texts and clear references to characteristics features. Right off the bat, you display clear comparative techniques; “...you can tell that there are many differences between the autobiography and my newspaper report.” Throughout your response, you discuss both forms of literature, point of view, type of languages, and other things each has in common.
For AO3, I would give you 7 marks considering your detailed comparative analysis of elements structure, form, and language. In the second paragraph, you discuss the structure of each piece; “The autobiography and the newspaper article that was written by me aren't structured differently when coming down to the basics.” You discuss how the structure is mainly trying to get across the key points. In the last sentence, you include where they contrast; Usain’s mentality. Paragraph three talks about the forms of literature. The way you worded this paragraph is kind of difficult to understand, but from what I've picked up, there is not much in common here because of its vast differences. Elaboration differs here when comparing the story of Usain with the key details in your news report. Lastly, in paragraph five we see the types of languages used. You compare the descriptions of what Usains is experiencing with his actual first-person quotes in the extract. “I was still 10 meters…”, and “... then it dawned on me.”, are both first-person examples.
Good Job!!
Hi Payton, I liked your writing for the first question however, I don’t think you answered the question to it’s prompt and it doesn’t seem you reached the audience of a journal article. I’ll give you a 1 on AO1 and a 1 AO2. I liked what you wrote though.
ReplyDeleteOn question B, I would not have as long runon sentences and try to include commas since your thoughts are kinda confusing. I can see the differences in your writing however, I also feel like you strayed off the question and didn’t identify the structure and only did form and language. On the form was good though and you correctly identified “Unlike the autobiography which is talking in first person since Usain Bolt is talking about himself and using the context all “I.” I would give you A level 3 on the AO1 and a level 2 on the AO3.